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rigor mortis- gotta fly by ~mandk:iconmandk:

Categories Manga/Anime > Traditional Media > Manga (comics) > Panels

©2009 ~mandk
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helloooooo~?
anybody remember what was going on?
y'know, with phillippe being found onthe floor in their house, and now they're having a cup of tea, discussing...things?

fortunately, i already have the next page drawn out, just hve to ink it, and submit it!
have fun, guys!

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~billvolk Apr 5, 2009, 12:05:45 AM
The gutters are getting to be a uniform width now, which is nice, but this page seems to be listing to port. I'd also like more non-close-ups that keep track of where everyone is in relation to each other.

And did it cut from a kitchen to a bar halfway through?
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=ShouYume Apr 9, 2009, 5:59:30 AM
Wow, this is really different from your usual style! Really great work! I do agree with billvolk on less closeups, and I'd like to see more stable inking (which I know will actually come with time and practice, though.) And continue to be attentive on realizing proportion and anatomy better, especially keeping the more heads in proportion to the bodies (don't feel too bad about it though, sometimes I have that problem, too.) You have a way with not only making a great story, but being consistent with carrying out your projects, and I have a feeling that readers are going to be even much more appealed by your work the more you continue to improve! =3 :heart:
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~mandk Apr 10, 2009, 2:03:49 PM
ah, yes, i did switch scenes in the middle of the page.should i have waited to make that scene it's own page?
i was a little worried about how to nudge the character back into the story, and if i had given him his own page, i thought it would disrupt the flow too much. am i wrong about this?

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When life gives the lemon, the lemonade is made
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~mandk Apr 10, 2009, 2:16:05 PM
stable inking?
as in my lines are a little iffy?
i apologize, i'm still trying to work on my unsteady hand that i have. if i draw swiftly, i have no problem with my lines, but once i start inking, i'm trying to follow the original pencils, and that slows me down, giving my hand opportunities to swerve and falter from the original lines.
but otherwise, i'm glas with where i'm heading, and i am still a work in progress, but in the right direction! just you wait until teh next page! (already inked and waiting to scan).
btw, happy b-day sy! buon compleanno!

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When life gives the lemon, the lemonade is made
:iconbillvolk:
~billvolk Apr 11, 2009, 12:23:14 AM
Maybe you could give the new scene a new establishing shot. And in the bottom left corner, it looks like he's reacting to something in the previous scene. What's he looking at?
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=ShouYume Apr 14, 2009, 7:33:11 AM
That's okay! It does take time and practice to have more fluid lines, I totally understand that! Just keep at it like you have been. You'll probably hear the same critique for a while from others too, but since you first started Rigor Mortis, I see a sound improvement!
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